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If the pen is mightier than the sword
Then a writer is a mighty man indeed
He is a master of words
And poetry is his creed

His simple phrases  
Placed in simple rhyme
Twist thoughts and emotions
Like a child with twine

He can make you feel
Textures unknown
Like the rough edges
Of a dragons bone

He can make you smell
Without a single breath
The cold rotting scent
Of a thing we call death

He can make you hear
A foreign sound
Like a loud-mouthed bard
In a renaissance town

It is with his words
He commits inception
With honest thoughts
And cruel deception

But before you know it
You will agree
With whatever he writes
Don't you see?

For the day is coming
When you'll find
That all your thoughts
Are from his mind

So heed this advice
Lest ye future grieve
The greatest lies
Are the ones you want to believe
This started as a poetic form a one of my characters monologues. After writing it and seeing how it actually became something. I decided to show it too a friend. Who loved it. I then showed it to another, more critical friend, who pointed out all its flaws, and that's with the edited version. I then set out to make even more edits, until finally I got this. Which I can honestly say I'm happy with. Do I think it has issues? Of course, too the extent that it genuinely bugs me. But for now, this is fine.
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sumgie1 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
I like how you took the idea "pen is mightier than the sword" further. :)
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Theblindbowman Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013
Thank you!. I always enjoy delving into old ideas that are often abandoned as cliche's.
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LOLlyACE Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Student General Artist
This is really good! Its moral is only too true... I'm curious, did you break the rhythm on the very last sentence on purpose?
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Theblindbowman Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013
The answer to that would be a yes and a no. I did want the last line to stand out, however I'm not exactly skilled enough to intentionally manipulate rhythms. Thank you for the comment!
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LOLlyACE Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Student General Artist
Well I think it was well done!

And you're welcome to have my comments! :D You deserve more.
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome!
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Theblindbowman Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
Thanks!
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome!
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QuantumInnovator Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012
This is a nice poem.

However, I would be very careful about who you tell "The Pen is mightier than the sword." For example, I wouldn't say something like that at the funeral of an individual who died in a hail of gunfire. It would surely be perceived as untrue and insensitive.
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Theblindbowman Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012
Oh I'm sorry, it would seam I overreacted... Here I am talking about not being hasty and I go an say something like that. XD I guess I'm just not used to criticism. Again, my apologies and thanks for the comment.
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